This is going to be really harsh in comparison with all the other comments.

To be honest, I don't find anything unique about this poem, there doesn't seem to be anything really special that grabs you. I do notice that you made the poem form the shape of a hammer, but if a poem doesn't take the form of a poem, it doesn't seem correct. The word "slamming" is split into one letter per line... It will help to extend the letters into a word that describes reality.

It lacks the essence of a poem.

Peace.
~Ger.

I like how you set it up. I like how you described a hammer. It is really short. Make it more descriptive and it will rock! Please read and review my stuff.

I really liked this, the setup is interesting!

I really liked this. Great message, and the formatting was awesome.

Nice work!

- Koki

Great work! It's hard to find concrete poetry that you can actually put up on this site (stupid formatting). Anyhow, nice work. Has a good message too.

cool, I like it!!