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| stormie_daze 2008-03-23 ch 1, anon. | abuse-too lazy to log in like this story when you gonna finish the other one huh? |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseA nice start! I'd like more details, though. What's the setting like? I don't think you ever elaborated on that, as well as where he found the girl. Was she all alone in a classroom? Either way, wouldn't the teacher or someone nearby have heard her screams? And it seemed to take him hardly any effort to knock her unconscious. Just a few things I was wondering about. |