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Kefrith 7/14/08 . chapter 1This is really great! I really like how you convey your message in more ways than just with the words themselves (emphasized letters, metaphors). You are a great writer, so keep it up! |
dancewhennobodyiswatching 3/23/08 . chapter 1i LOVE IT absolutely, positively love it it flows so well, lovelovelovelovelove it! |
vaudeville summers 3/20/08 . chapter 1Nice job with the "answer" part and your language is simply fantastic. This piece could be such a moving song, as well. When I read it, the emotions and messages practically cry out at me and I love it. This is exactly the sort of thing I aspire to write. Thank you. "Sinking dejectedly, into a lonely recess by the stomach...I meant to say yes." My God, I love those lines. I tried to find constructive criticism, but I can't really find any. The only line I don't really like is "Coming right now" because the repetition is a bit unnecessary, I think. Other than that, wonderful job. ((favorited)) Deanna |