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| dancewhennobodyiswatching 2008-03-23 ch 1,  | abusei LOVE IT absolutely, positively love it it flows so well, lovelovelovelovelove it! |
| vaudeville summers 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseNice job with the "answer" part and your language is simply fantastic. This piece could be such a moving song, as well. When I read it, the emotions and messages practically cry out at me and I love it. This is exactly the sort of thing I aspire to write. ^^ Thank you. "Sinking dejectedly, into a lonely recess by the stomach...I meant to say yes." My God, I love those lines. I tried to find constructive criticism, but I can't really find any. The only line I don't really like is "Coming right now" because the repetition is a bit unnecessary, I think. Other than that, wonderful job. ((favorited)) ~Deanna |