Reviews for Emotional Weather

Silv3rDr34mS 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseReview Game! I really like how you used the weather to describe your emotions. It's very nice. Plus, I haven't seen this before, so it's refreshing to see something new. I feel the first part isn't that strong and it wasn't until the second part that really drew me into this poem. Perhaps you could switch the second part with the first part to make your opening stronger? I particularly like the idea of thunder screaming, probably because I've never heard someone describe thunder as screaming. Overall, this was short but very well written - it's nice and straight to the point. ~silv3rdr34ms
writingxonxwalls 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abusereview game =) Well- I love how you used the comparison between the weather and emotions. They do fit together, as you described. My favorite part would most definitely be, "The screams of thunder / echo through the silent night". The only thing I would change would be the rain part. It's very self explanatory, and I personally think that the beginning of a poem should be somewhat mysterious or an opening to a story. Does that make sense? Haha- if it doesn't PM me. Great work though!! - WxOxW
simpleplan13 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abusepour down like sheet of water... a sheet or sheets I loved the second two descriptions, but the first one was a tad cliche... plus they aren't like sheets of water they actually are sheets of water. Anyhow a really nice piece with beautiful and interesting imagery with the last four lines