Well, the formatting could use some work, but there's plenty of raw emotion in this piece. Music, blood, shadows, it all mixes together to produce a seriously morose work. The angst generally saturates this poem, so it could've used a bit more imagery. That really isn't what angst poems are about, though, so just consider it.

This really had a plenty deep atmosphere and does its work in creating such a critically-dark poem. Thumbs-up.

oh dear

Oh what a happy poem.

Yeah I feel like that sometimes.

Not great is it?

If this is actually how you feel, talk to someone. Hurting yourself won't actually help, and some people seem to think this is a form of attention seeking, so ignore you in the hopes that you will stop.