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wordsworth in a garbage can 2008-06-28 ch 1,	abuseI love you for writing this. first, the idea (I love the 20s) but you make it so real. the reader can inject themselves into it. it has a modern feel to it- inescapable, but so good. can't imagine emotions have changed much in almost a hundred years.
from beneath the bell jar 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abuseVery provocative...sophisticated, I guess would be the word for it. Interesting story - very original. I was much more intrigued by the last two stanzas detailing her interaction with the man. I didn't totally understand the poem but I really liked it and wanted to understand, so I did some research, and it seems even more brilliant now that I have some insight into what you're talking about. I've always loved the phrase "I have to see a man about a dog" but I never knew before that it was used during the Prohibition for when someone when to see their bootlegger. Since you mentioned in the summary that it was about a 20's flapper, I can only assume that's what you're alluding to. And I looked up 'vamp' (gotta love Wikipedia) and found that alluring women (i.e. femme fatales) were often referred to as vamps, short for vampiresses. So I think I've got the story down, but there's one thing I don't understand still...I had some trouble in the second stanza: 'black plastic at my mouth' - what's the black plastic? Also, what's the predatory creature? At first I thought you were still talking about the train, but once you mentioned 'some other doll with murder and hedonism on the brain' I thought maybe you were talking about a guy...? PLEASE message or review me - I'm dying to know! As to the wording, it's very cleverly written with an obvious amount of effort put into it. The first line is very eye-catching and gives a romantic image of the kind of black-and-white movie era. I also like the use of the word nomadic in the second line. I love all the imagery here. I have a very clear image of a charming,arrogant man in a suit and a bowler hat and a beautiful woman in a sparkly flapper dress. Lots of imagery. Like the last stanza, I get a smokey back room in some club with pretty girls and gambling and booze and what not. I hope I haven't totally misinterpreted this. God this turned out to be a long review. Great piece, but I would really appreciate it if you'd message me about the parts I was confused about. Pwease?
summerbee 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abusethe blind assassin is one of my favorite books. it's enormously beautiful. this poem is beautiful as well. I like the tone that's conversational but oddly sophisticated at the same time. and frankly I am just enamored with that second stanza.
alicer 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abusehm. it's good, of course, interesting and refreshing and obviously above the level of most poetry here... BUT i'm not sure if i nessacarily LIKE IT, which might just be me. the last line was sort of off as in didn't seem to go well (fit the theme, just too short, maybe?) and i def. don't understand "so i say "haven't you got to see a man about a dog?" and we are even again." (but i guess someone not understanding your poetry isn't a reason to change it). but i did like "so i say "haven't you got to see a man about a dog?" and we are even again."

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