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| Angel-Leigh Jones 2008-06-16 ch 1,  | abusehiya wonderful short story. any child would love to read or hear that. have you though to getting it published into a kids book. Very good. angel |
| Zonne 2008-04-19 ch 1, | abuseThat's another sweet fairy tale. I like the story in general. Cute and charming I hope you can figure out how to break it up into proper paragraphs. I think it needs more fleshing out too. Has so much potential, but needs more strength. zonne the review marathon link in my profile |
| LeenaElle 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseSo cute! Loved it! Your sisters must have enjoyed all of your stories! I don't know what else to say, other than I thought the idea for this was really creative, and cute, and had all the elements of an excellent fairy tale! |
| totallyinspired 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseaw thats so totally adorable! and i love the whole tugging hair part, and the part where the prince said "I’m going to marry you when we grow up" aww thats so cute! one thing though, i dont know if this is just because i'm incredibly slow - as my best friend persistently tells me - but i dont get how the woodsman was the prince. because wouldnt she have recognised him? ah well, great story :-) |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseAww! Very cute. (: It reads just like a fairytale. My only suggestion would be to explain how exactly he managed to turn it into a diamond, because I was curious. Did he disappear into the forest to study magic or something like that? Also, split this up into multiple paragraphs so it doesn't look so clumped together. Other than that, I thought this was very nice! |