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| Chasmodai Blue 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseI'm feeling it man, but maybe it's because I've been there too. It was beautiful. Half the stuff on this site is just a stack of words and it was good to read something with actual emotion. Kudos. |
| dominic+leo 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseman have i been there! love the peom even though it makes me think about one of my ex-boyfriends... not getting into that... though i will say that this poem did bring a tear to my eye... 10 outta 10. ^-^ -Dommy |
| OnyxParadox 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseHon, that's...well sad...but I want to say it's beautiful...I just don't know if that is such a good word to describe it with...oh well I'm using it anyways. Nice work Honey, keep it up. ^_^ |
| red-headed psychopaths want... 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseAnd once again you have moved me to the brink of tears. Good luck on getting your guy. Lotz of love, psychopaths |
| Incurable Dreamer 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseI really felt the emotions here. Your command of the language is very strong, and I like how you used questions to convey the frustration that seems to surface with unrequited love. My only comment would be that you replace your last line with, "Or have I found the brink of insanity?" The "Or" might add more impact and greater sense of finality to your piece. Other than that, this was a great read. =) |
| fatbird33 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abusei like the whole brink of insanity thing. some of the lines were a little long however and could've been broken down into two stanzas. |