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| Isca 2008-05-23 ch 1,  | abuseThis is just phenomenal! |
| Edensong 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abuse'muttering sonnets frozen on my tongue Shakespeare wrongly grabbed my shoulders and shook out' The most creative line about poetry I've ever read. |
| Jon Blue 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abusehm...I like the first stanza amazing not sure why it's called stockholm not so sure about the second stanza though __muttering sonnets frozen on my tongue Shakespeare wrongly grabbed my shoulders and shook out I know what you're saying but it doesn't sound right. I love the use of Shakespeare though, he's one of the only poets synonymous with sonnets, however the wording doesn't sound right...the way it is now, it leaves you wondering what exactly he shook out. I know its the sonnets, at least I think that's what it is, perhaps I am all wrong, but anyway that has a bit of imagery to it that I enjoy nicely. seeing shakespeare just grab some girl and start shaking her so she can mutter sonnets, sorta funny...anyway you go back to talking about the dust in the end which works. I have nothing much else to say except that was terrific as well... |
| Written 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abusewow. what an interesting poem! you've taken an idea and made it wholly original. |
| Johannas mirror 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseI sure as heck dont get it. but...thats usually the point |