Reviews for we are the Different ones

Reviews For: we are the Different ones

Almsivi 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseThis will go on my Favorites list. I love how it begins so happily but quickly turns sad in the third stanza. It was a little confusing past that point, but not so much that I couldn't understand it.
siphoned afterglow 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abusei think i've read this on deviant but still, just wanted to tell you that i love it
the face in the window 2008-03-24 ch 1,	abuse"of a mother who writes sin on her daughter with a blazing gaze and a little broken boy who curls up in a lonely corner of society whisper-screaming with shameless eyes that he's wrapped up trapped in an alien body" brilliant. i love how you capitalized some words such as (in the title) "different" and (in the poem) "beautiful" and "fate". nice write. rowan.
glimpses from an ivory towe... 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseThe most evocative piece I've read in awhile. Imagery was ever-present and spectacular, I loved "a grey october dawn and rain" and "captives of an arbitrary fish-bowl of Fate" You broke up your stanzas beautifully, and I loved the fifth stanza best of all. I know this feeling...thank you for putting it into words so perfectly.
Johannas mirror 2008-03-22 ch 1,	abuseI like all your taste/touch/smell imagery. Very well written. ~jo
simpleplan13 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abuseOK you asked about the line breaks so I shall start there... -The first one I didn't like because the rain seems to be part of the next image not so much the first one. Unfortunately to do that you'd prolly hafta rearrange some other lines since just putting rain on the next line would make it a it long -The third stanza.. laid gentle lapping confused me so the break there sounded awkward, but it might have just been because I'm not sure what you meant by that. -in the dark beside you as you pulled away/from me into yourself and i drifted off with wet cheeks to nightmares... I think the away from me should be on the same line. I'm not sure if putting that on the second line messes up the third though... I had a few thoughts if you want them just PM me -he's wrapped up trapped/in an alien body.. I think trapped could go on the next line, but if it doesn't I think it needs a comma between up and trapped -In the last stanza... I dunno I felt like captives should either be on the next line or at least put of on the first line. To be fair... I'm not insanely excellent with the way things sound. I might PM Esther Jade, she's good at that and I'm sure she'd review you if you asked nicely and/or offered her a review in return Anyhow the piece itself is just beautiful because all the descriptions are wonderful. I love the second stanza (though you said and pulled me in sounded a bit awkward you pulled me in and said just seems to flow better, but maybe you strayed from the obvious intentionally...) since the descriptions of what you smell like are perfect. I also like how beautiful is the only word you capitalized. Beautiful piece
Faith Adeline 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abusei love this piece. very nice job. strong. Faith
Definition 2008-03-21 ch 1,	abuseHm, to be honest I'm not quite sure what to make of this, but it's simply beautiful. One line that seems to stick in my mind is /that i smelled of Beautiful and milk chocolate kisses/of sun-drenched autumns and crisp fallen leaves/. It's very pretty, its sweet. And the last 2 lines are great. An arbitrary fish-bowl? Haha xD. Btw, thanks for the review :)

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