Awesome story!

aw...really cute story

Haha, I don't think Jade is dense. I mean, it takes a lot of confidence to think that someone likes you back, right? No one goes around thinking "he's in love with me too" or anything like that.

At least I don't think so...

Or maybe I just have confidence issues...

Well, whatever it may be, I loved this story. I think Jade rocks, actually. Plus I can relate to that clown-hating thing. I hate clowns too. Stupid paint-on smile that never goes away... so creepy!! Gah!! I never had clowns on my birthdays coz I always cried when they tried to get near me. Haha, ergo my clown-less childhood parties XD

You're great. Probably hear it a lot but you are really really great. I've read almost all your oneshots (these one is my favorite) and I'd love every single one of them. Thanks for giving us these wonderful stories.

LOL so cute!

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Ha! Yeah she is pretty dense. Loved it!

That was such an adorable one-shot! The idea was so cute, and I love Tan...:) Great job. :)

interesting story...I didn't know you guys celebrate so many things in Australia! oh yeah and she really is a bit too dense to be real...unless she's a blondie :D

This story is absolutely adorable! I knew the clown was Nataniel from the first moment but it's perfect like that because... you KNEW what was going on, just like Nataniel. So, although it was being narrated by Jade, we were also looking at it from Nataniel's perspective, the one who knew it and just kept playing along. Us readers also knew and played along being amused by Jade's reactions and with our hearts in the edge wondering when she was going to find out!

I think I could be Jade. I'm smart but extremelly absent minded and I could totally put myself in a situation like that. I like clowns anyway, and it was too adorable knowing than underneath the costume there was someone such as Nat.

Loved the scene in the cream sofa where he says "you have no idea". And the balloon pops. Perfect.

Jade is too dense to be true? I -cough- am probably denser than her, so i guess you're wrong. Still, great story. Though I did figure out that Tan was Nataniel in the end. Maybe I'm not THAT dense? Who cares. Great story!

adorable and original.

i also enjoyed the narrator. Jade spoke as if speaking to a friend.. i like how it wasn't formal narrating.

anyway, great job darling

love this
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jade is very dense but that just makes it better

*SQUEE* This was absolutely AWESOME! I loved every bit of it. So sweet! hehe. You have yet to fail to amaze me. =D

Nataniel sounds like quite a dish. And I guess you really can't be too young to fall in love. Well, to realise that it's the real thing, I think you'd have to be older. But to actually fall in love, I guess there really isn't an age.

Keep up the good work!

gulistanlik

wow, i'm speechless. really, i just love it. i know that you asked for constructive criticism, but i can't think of a thing to say :D maybe that i want it to continue :(:( no, it's really perfect and sweet and nice and just good to read :D it's just ... awesome :D:D

I'll agree Jade is too dense, and she's not my favorite character in the world, but she is entertaining. (: I like the whole clown and NaTANiel thing (I figured that out, hehe), and this was still a good oneshot, though I agree not your best. (:
(Oh and yes, I will continue reviewing all your oneshots because apparently my staff liked them so much they added them all. Haha.)
So yes, I'm still glad Queen of Absolutely Everything added this to our c2. (: