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| misfit819 2008-03-30 ch 1,  | abuseVery different stroy. I really like the characters personalities so far. You can tell what they are like and how they feel towards eachother. Write more soon, can't wait to read it! |
| Simple Thoughts 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is a very intriging story. Please keep up the good work and update soon. |
| xxvisionaryxx 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseIt was good. I liked how the sentences and paragraphs were short, it seemed to fit the way that a patient of some sort would feel. The only thing I didn't really like was the name being heaven backwards, well, I found it annoying that it was pointed out. Same with Elijah, I like names to have significance, but I thought it was too blatant to just have it pointed out like that. |
| DallasTheMalice 2008-03-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseAh! Gah! I cannot believe you! You stopped too SOON! What comes next? What happens to the guard? To Neveah? To Elijah? OH! *crumples in fit of despair* Write more soon! |