It was quite short but it is a one-shot, though. Particularly, i liked this line, "The sea of grass put on their shiny green dresses, each outshining the last as they reached up to the stretch of blue and white."

good work!
keep it up!
:)

Hey!

The first thing I noticed about this piece of writing was that the first paragraph was really long. That kind of thing can often scare potential readers away, so you might try to break that up into smaller paragraphs.

However, I liked how you described the events and atmosphere in this piece, I could actually imagine the settings around me.

Good Work,

-Kaiyako K.

That was rather creepy. But very very good.