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| Take the Money and Run 2008-03-22 ch 1,  | abuseWow I really like the idea of this, and the flow and rhyme of it seems really natural. After the line "The universe is always," it doesn't really make sense to have the period there. Same with "If they were, they'd be enormous," that should probably be a comma. Good job, --SB |