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| avelseth 2008-07-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love that "and don’t disappoint me" line absolute gold that really sounds like what a king might say :) |
| kloun doll 2008-05-10 ch 1,  | abusewow, sometimes having power is being "strong" I mean, there's need to sacrifice something or someone to win |
| Two Of Spades 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseThats quite a sobering story. I liked it though, especially the ending. I just wish it had more flesh to it. I mean, it is a oneshot, but it still feels like it could be a little more substantial, more themes, emotions, or just more emphasis on the ones already there perhaps? |
| asylum writer 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseThat's sad. good characterization of the king, especially the not caring about the peasant. This part made me laugh though - "Stop complaining, and do what your father tells you." It was the same thing someone would say when the kid won't take out the trash or something like that, except here it's going into battle. Slightly more important than trash, but with the same typical phrase. |
| Purpose 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseOh, that was sad. It kind of reminds me of Denethor and Faramir's relationship, but in this case the father was a real dickhead (excuse my language). |