You gave me the biggest shock when I saw the "Well, until she got cancer and died, anyway." part. Suck a pity it was going so well too. It's very interesting and I'd love to see what you'll do with it!

great story so far, hope you update the next chapter! The story is really well done and has a great flow to it. I really enjoyed reading it.

MORE?
*begs and pleads*

PWEASE?

Wow, this is really beautiful. I love it, especially because it sounded like a fairytale in the beginning. xDD That's really original and rare, unless someone is actually writing a fairytale. I hope you continue this. I would love to know what happens. :D

:)
caught my interest.

Interesting, very interesting. I think you did a great job. I certainly had that fairy tale feel, if a slightly modern one. But hey, I want to see more. Update soon? I love it!

It is sort of fairytalish. I like it either way. Remember though that some of the older fairytales are kind of morbid.

The beginning sound EXactly like a fairytal~ I would love to read this if you do continue it!

Wow- you had the fairy tale effect down perfectly and when the mother died it was like hearing the needle scratch, it was great! I'd love to see the rest of this story it seems like a project well worth persuing.

This is great, and follows traditional fairytail writing up until the cancer bit. after a few sentences it gets right back into it though, so it's not a problem. Are you going to continue it? Please?

It was amazing! As usual, lol. Yes, it sounded very much like a fairy tale, until you say "And they lived happily ever after". After that, it was still sort of fairy tale-ish, but more like in a Shrek manner - non conventional.

I hope there will be more

~Tempre's Twilight~

...cancer? when was this story supposed to be made that they knew about the existence of cancer? and that's a horrible place to stop c'mon. O.Omore plase. :

This story has potential to become an invigorating, fresh take on the classic romantic fairytales with the interesting plot, and indivualistic point perspective you've given Kaedes. I hope you decide to continue this intriguing bit of fiction =D

Interesting! eager to read more :)

Ick, trying to write a fairytale. I'll pass. I think you succeeded, though.