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| b 2008-05-06 ch 1,  | abusewonderful and really cute at the end. the asclepion was completely believable as a fully functional secret society, and the magic also felt very real. actually i feel like the ending could've been a bit more bittersweet since andrew keeps dying, but in this story death is treated very lightly anyway. sort of reminds me of that "thousand years" song by sting. |
| Amindaya 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseI like how at the end he gave up trying to change fate and just focused on trying to be happy. |
| rebecca 2008-03-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI loved the idea of this story. I think you did a great job with it; keep up the good work! |
| Jenny Hatter 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseYou have a great gift for writing. I'm serious. This, and the stories you've written before marvel me. I, once again, notice your ties to the Vietnamese heritage. I'm delighted that you include it in your stories. Sometimes, I wonder if I've met you before. Just sometimes. Maybe at Phuoc Loc Tho or something. I don't know. Just keep on writing. I can tell you're a great author. |
| Not.So.Little 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseThis was an incredible story. It wasn't as sad as I thought it would be after reading the description; in fact, it wasn't sad at all. It was just all-around great. Near the beginning, when I hadn't completely set the characters to memory, I got Alan and Andrew a little mixed up because their names both start with A. I got over it, though. Despite the fact that Andrew keeps on dying, this story made me smile. The way you wrote it had a very calm effect; this definitely was not a scream out loud story, but it was no less (can't think of the word. envisioning a blow directly to the heart. impactful?) for it. I loved it. |
| lu 2008-03-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseI loved this. :) |
| Sunshine 2008-03-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseI love a good story. And this is one of those. It had a solemn way of telling the story, but not making it boring, because you always want to know, if mayby, just maybe, Andrew was going to live this time. One can almost feel Alan's pain, and frustration. It is a great one-shot, but it leaves the reader satisfied, because you know there is hope. It is a great piece, I hope you carry on with your work. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abusemost of it was excellent. however in the middle it gets all mixed up and I'm not sure who's who. i'd like to see a redo of this bc I know you have the talent. |