Aww, I really like this poem its pretty strong. My favorite stanza would have to be the first one. One suggestion I would have is to end the poem with the line "Right before I die," because you end the first two stanzas with it and it seems like a pattern is starting to form, but then you just leave it. it'd be fine if it was just the third one that didn't have that line but I'd like to see that line come back.

Kind of reminds me of my poem "I Will be There"... I mean, I'm not trying to advertise, but anyway... lol nice poem overall!

--SB, courtesy of the review game

*chokes* just kidding i enjoyed it.

I don't know why, truly I don't, but this poem set something off in me, and I'm sitting here at my computer practically gagging. I love it, its a charming poem. I think Im allergic to it, though.

So cue... when you write these poems i wonder who you are refering to... is it a certain boy or one you haven't met yet?
~veg