I really liked this one. Its a bit wacky and cheerful. (At least to me it seems that way.) I guess if you were in love thats the way if would feel.

I felt like this piece is a half woven rug on a loom. It started out really nicely, but I think you lost the flow after "And careful wraps"

It sorta stopped rhyming coherently and seemed to go more into ranting than writing.

I really did like the first part though.

-TMO