Perfect, seriously perfect.

Wow. That was unexpectedly funny. Almost like a night-terror with an anti-climactic ending. Good job making us sympathize with the characters right before you killed them, too.

This story reminds me very much of something Stephen King would write. It was excellent.

I really like this story! You did a great job with your descriptions, I could see the creature perfectly. ;) and aspirin is bad for your stomach!