OMG I LOVE IT! so dark and it is thrilling! amazing! love the chocie of words! just amazing! LOOKING FORWARD FOR MORE!

I like this... it was interesting and the word choice descriptions were really great. The only thing is the phrasing was a bit off, but other than that nice job.

I like the elevated language that you've used to enhance the overall scene and tone. This paints a detailed picture of the relationship without personalizing it too much that the reader can't relate. Well written. MD:77.

As always, fantastic job! I can definitely relate to this... =\

WOW, lurid. What does one even SAY to this? It was incredible, truly incredible. You have SUCH a way with words, just put me to shame, why don't you? Amazing, wonderful. Nice work
~BJ