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| misery sister 2008-04-09 ch 2,  | abuseVery good. But oh, I wanted to point out that all numbers from 0 - 100 should be spelled out. So all the 50s you have here should be spelled 'fifty'. |
| misery sister 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abuseGood beginning. It drags me in. :) |
| Alice C. Walker 2008-04-02 ch 6, | abuseI love the story plot. I love your style of writing and i thought the prologue was absolutlely outstanding! Only thing i have to say about it is that i think the story is moving to fast. Colin is feelings things after never having felt them before and automatically knows what they are and how to deal with them. He is deciding life and death decisions with really thinking them over. Faye has a good personality and so im not sure if being abrupt about personal matters is natural for her or she is cold and so her family's history is easily given up to a stranger at school within the first few seconds of meeting. These few things are just something you can think about and just my own opinion so please don't feel offended. Amazing story though :] |
| LoverOfDemons 2008-03-31 ch 6, | abuseteehee i like Faye. i probably would have acted like that, too, if some guy had been rude when i tried to be friendly. i think that colin's got the hots! (not literally, of course) |
| LoverOfDemons 2008-03-30 ch 4, | abuseHaha, now things start happening! yes! That was a nice bit you put in aot colin not thinking that he was handsome. so modest...*sigh* and i already like Faye a lot, even though she's only said a few words! |
| LoverOfDemons 2008-03-25 ch 3, | abusegasp! what's in the letter?! |
| Vampire0175 2008-03-25 ch 3, | abuseAwesome story. Cant wait for you to update. -Raven |
| LoverOfDemons 2008-03-24 ch 2, | abuseoh, cliffie ending! i like Colin...update soon so i can find out more!! |
| LoverOfDemons 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abusegaahh OH my god, I MUST READ MORE! what was it, eight sentences? you already have me hooked! |