Those are very strong descriptive words you used. I really liked it alot. Please read and review my stuff.

Hey, awesome poem - I loved the reality of it and the fact that it was all about life, the giving and taking never being given anything in return, I've been on the recieving end of that situation before, and this explains it well ^__^ excellent and beautiful language with interesting vocabulary as usual

Emma x

They shone so bright... brightly

Great to see you writing again! Really nice piece... the word choice was exceptional and I really loved the description "paper-thin souls" that was beautiful