I really like the layered meanings to this; it encourages multiple readings. It's surprisingly difficult for me to pinpoint exactly what appeals here, because there's so much from which to choose.

This actually seems pretty clear to me, but maybe that's just me. I like the title and the last two stanzas, and the general theme. Very haunting. "Not dead or dying,/but turning blue for kicks." The mix of formality and informality works well in this piece.

Really haunting and beautiful piece. I love how ethereal it seems, yet grounded, if that makes any sense. The imagery in the second stanza is particularly strong; I can see and feel the whole thing. Something is really bugging me about "Soon you will gasp my breath/and my lips inherit your chill." I think it's just the lack of a second "will," though that's not really necessary. The tenses don't seem to match up or something. The last stanza is just great. Love it. Keep writing! :)

I have a hard time making sense out of this one. The first few verses takes the reader to believe that there is something sexual going on then as it goes further and further into the poem i'm able to make less sense out of it. I'll try re-reading this a few more times to grasp what I can from this one, but the last stanza was striking.

arcane

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I really didn't know what to make of this piece. While I like poems that are open to interpretation, this one is a little too abstract for me. Not that this is a bad thing, I can be clueless at times. =)

Even though I didn't really understand this, I like how random it is (it is random in a good way) because these kinds of poems are rare.

I particularly liked the second half of the poem because of the irony. You first suggest that someone has died (my interpretation of it) but then, you refute it and have someone else take their place and finally, have both people die. I loved this part.

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~Lime

I like this. My conception of what it means is probably totally different from anyone else's, but that's okay. Ambiguity works for some things.

marie

I love it, I love it, I love it. I tried to think of concrit, but it would break my heart if you changed anything. The whipped cream on a wonderful hot chocolatey day. So god, I can't stand it. But it made my day...nothing's ever this poetic anymore.

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~DeAnna