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Ashelin
2008-03-31
ch 1,
abuseI don't know why, but I loved this. Something familiar in the metaphors and word pictures you used, but so not your usual stuff. I don't know, but it was lovely. So many odd ends sticking out of one poem to make a kaliedascope of sweet and color and dreams underneath my tongue. Simply lovely. Great job! So glad you're back!
perpetual questions
2008-03-29
ch 1,
abuseI love the surreal yet comprehensible imagery. The only thing I didn't like was "drumming on a drum", like your first reviewer said. Otherwise, amazing as always. And I love the lines you put in the summary.
kloun doll
2008-03-28
ch 1,
abuseBluebells and violet,
caked in snow – this a nice imagery.

to me this sounds like a funny song, I mean the rhyme is pretty good.
Silv3rDr34mS
2008-03-27
ch 1,
abuseI really like this poem because each stanza portrays something that someone may encounter in real life.

I didn't really like the phrase, "drumming on a drum" it sounds a little redundant. perhaps, try "beating on a drum"?

Another thing I liked was the word choice behind this, especially at the part where it read "So give the skeleton a piano/just so we can dance to his sorrowful tunes."

I was a little confused at the last line, why is "(me?)" there? Does it meant that both you and her fall in love?

I enjoyed this poem very much. *adds to faves* =)
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