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| demonsdisciple 2008-04-09 ch 1, | abuseLovely. Love the idea of personifying a streetlight. An original idea and an original poem. |
| Professional Dreamer 2008-03-25 ch 1, | abuseWhat I like best? The idea of signs on a streetlamp starting to itch. And it going blind. Those are fantastic personifications. |
| Falcon/CC/ Cha-Kid 2008-03-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseGAH! I lurve this one and when I feel like logging in I will put it on favorites! One thing: "it's" is "it is" so you need to change it to "its" in the line "float in *its* honey-colored pool of radiance." M favorite line is "but they are starting to itch." Falcon |
| Amethyst Leirda PhotoMaster 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseAw :( It's so sad! I like the combination of free form poetry and story format. It seems different from other more recent works I've read but still follows your general voice. I like it. |
| In the Rye 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abuseHmnn. I liked the idea. I'm not sure you completely got the style you were going for, though. But it was decent. |