 demonsdisciple 2008-04-09 . chapter 1Lovely. Love the idea of personifying a streetlight. An original idea and an original poem. |
 Professional Dreamer 2008-03-25 . chapter 1What I like best? The idea of signs on a streetlamp starting to itch. And it going blind. Those are fantastic personifications. |
 Falcon/CC/ Cha-Kid 2008-03-25 . chapter 1 GAH! I lurve this one and when I feel like logging in I will put it on favorites!
One thing: "it's" is "it is" so you need to change it to "its" in the line "float in *its* honey-colored pool of radiance."
M favorite line is "but they are starting to itch."
Falcon |
 Amethyst Leirda PhotoMaster 2008-03-24 . chapter 1Aw :( It's so sad! I like the combination of free form poetry and story format. It seems different from other more recent works I've read but still follows your general voice.
I like it. |
 In the Rye 2008-03-24 . chapter 1Hmnn. I liked the idea. I'm not sure you completely got the style you were going for, though. But it was decent. |