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found.eventually 2008-05-11 ch 11,	abuseDAMN IT. I was like, 'oh, zomg, she's bold...' to 'gasp, this really is happening, isn't it?' to 'INTENSE INTENSE INTENSE INTENSE INTENSE' and then dropped down to 'damn you, tommy.' :/ WHY. Anyway, where was I? Oh. Yeah. Loved it. How could I not? :)
Written Incognito 2008-05-10 ch 11,	abuseI knew it was Tommy! It was just so weird for it to be Khali and be like "HAY I CHANGED MY MIND I LURVE YOU LETS DO IT" hahahaha. This was a fun chapter. BUT EILAM. WHY DID HE LIE?
gulistanlik 2008-05-10 ch 11,	abuseHaha yeah Allyson was in here with her famous pies! Omg that was so disturbing. I was like, 'woah, she's decided she's in love with him pretty quick' and poor Ian is going to be scarred for life. Unless if the real Khali can do better than Tommy, ahahaha! But seriously, ew. And how did Tommy know all that info about Khali? Did he just look into Ian's memories and then used those to manipulate him? Anyhow, keep up the good work dearest! gulistanlik
Katie Saychiadu 2008-05-09 ch 11,	abuseHere comes a LONG review: 1. Wow, oh wow! The whole thing was so awesome. I laughed, I cried, I was surprised, then surprised some more... In other words, it was perfect! 2. Allyson's cameo was great. 3. Eilam's behavior is probably getting really annoying (to Ian and Khali) but it's so funny to me! 4. So sweet! “I think I might be falling in love with you.” 5. Two words: Happy trail...!! 6. When "Khali" said: “Psh, no way,” I was like, umm, that's so Tommy. 7. And then he appeared and I laughed for (checking the clock)10 straight minutes. Love the description used. Aw jeez, there were just so many good parts that I don't know what else to say about it except GREAT JOB!
Written 2008-05-06 ch 10, anon.	abuseMy computer crashed halfway through this review! dfhejr. oh right, so in response to your replies... don't worry, i do read for the fun! it's just that I was also way too sleepy yesterday, so it was like a conflict of interests... DO I REA OR DO I SLEEP? obviously, sleep won out in the end. you are seriously awesome for updating as often as you do. I'm kind of in pain because of all my walking up the stairs (elevator being broken an all), and so I think of Henry from time to time, but there's no writing going on! my legs are getting pretty buff though. especially since laundry is on the 18th floor! okay so eilam's comments on their ages was really funny, not gonna lie. columbus IS kind of a joke... hahah. JK... Hope you're not his biggest fan or something... OH AND THE NEWTON THING. too funny. (“Everything with Khali is fine. I was referring to the fact that my best friend just died. That’s the rough part.” ) hahahaha. oh man, you are SO funny. (“I am a little uneasy with the idea of the two of you alone in there talking about people getting married and having children. Can you please stop?”) so many great lines! this was a great chapter. loved the interaction with eilam for sure, an khali and our main character have such great chemistry! please write more, etc. :D
found.eventually 2008-05-04 ch 10,	abuseHAHAHAHA. SHE WAS THE ONE WHO THREW THE APPLE AT NEWTON? I totally did not see that one coming! And I'm starting to like Eilam. I don't know why. The moment he muttered "cradle robber", i've fallen for him. XP OKay. I'm weird.
Twilight Starr 2008-05-04 ch 10,	abuseCute chapter. I'm wondering if Eilam will really get in between them. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2008-05-04 ch 9,	abuseIt was a very informative chapter. Maybe we'll find out what happens if a demon eats a Khalid/Samad's soul. Maybe that could uplift the curse. Just thinking a bit too much. ;) Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~
Katie Saychiadu 2008-05-04 ch 10,	abuse1. LOFN'L: “I—I—I,” —lost the ability to form sentences? 2. You bring up an interesting point: why is it okay for supernatural old people to hit on young children (i.e. Khali or vampires)? But if a 40 year old man dates an 18 year old chick, we think it's sick? LOL 3. So many great lines, and I'm only a quarter od the way into it... LOL: Seriously, Khali could be unbelievably scary. 4. Ian's mom is insane!! Virtue.. LOL 5. And the laughs keep coming!! HYSTERICAL: Eilam busting in and asking Ian and Khali to stop talking about marriage. LOLOLOL 6. I've always loved Ian, but I love confident Ian even more!! In general, this was a very awesome chapter - GrannyP at her best! So funny, I mean, how do you do it? I like the chapter title and the Newton bit was funny too, but he doesn't get a number. The sibling type interaction between Khali and Eilam was AWESOME! I can't wait until a literary agent gets ahold of you...
Twilight Starr 2008-05-04 ch 8,	abuseI didn't find it vague. I love those chapters that write themselves. Or seem like they write themselves. I liked hearing some about Khali. It was interesting. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~
gulistanlik 2008-05-04 ch 10,	abuseSQUEE I can feel and practically SEE the chemistry! And it is incredibly amazingly sweet! Not to mention smoking...sly smile Finally we have some authority from not just Khali but Ian. And I just wanted to grab a phonebook and doink it on Eilam's head when he stated why he doesn't want Ian to touch Khali. Little kid much? 'Eww! Gross!'. He's a hypocrite. He thinks he's older than Khali cos he is physically so, yet when it comes to Ian and Khali as a couple, he says that she's so many thousand years old and forget the physical age that he uses himself. But above all, it amuses me. All of this. Keep up the good work! your faithful reader and reviewer, gulistanlik
found.eventually 2008-05-03 ch 9,	abuseOH MY GOD. SHE INVENTED MAKE UP. My sister would've been so psyched! XP And yes, the story is easy to follow. And I'm pretty slow, so that's saying something. This proved how dorky Ian is: "Against his best judg(you left out an e)ment, Ian reached out and took Khali’s hands within his own. “It’s okay,” he said calmly. But then he saw the look on Khali’s face, and he knew that she was about to dispute his claim that “it’s okay.” He quickly recovered. “I mean, it’s okay for you to be so angry. You’re right. That was a terrible, selfish thing for them to do.”" It's just so easy to imagine him saying that! And aww, damn it, they're in love.
Katie Saychiadu 2008-04-30 ch 9,	abuseI started reading this about an hour ago but was interrupted a bunch of times! Darn interruptions! My usual... 1. My favorite line: "A long, long time ago, I... existed." 2. Did Ian really say "Scout's honor?" LOL 3. Tommy-demon is a much cooler name than Tom-ato, HA! 4. Perfect ending..
gulistanlik 2008-04-29 ch 9,	abuseThis was easy to follow and I'm glad that bitch Medea is suffering. But that gave her no bloody right, the evil bastard, to curse others because she did something very selfish. Many more selfish acts. And let me guess, Medea is going to be in the story, as in the characters will be coming face to face with her? Interesting. I'm actually more curious now as to what is going to happen now that the mystery has been unravelled. I'm excited as ever! Keep up the good work! your faithful reader and reviewer, gulistanlik
Written Incognito 2008-04-28 ch 9,	abuseso I totally began to review this but my computer froze and sorta died. EEP. well I'm here now. I read as far as the "princess" bit. so cute. red hair is very common in stories about magical people... I remember that from my childhood fantasy reading days... I'm glad she's not soulless! treaties... oh ian... hahaha. so your author note reminded me of people who read talia and told me it wasn't historically accurate... hee hee. I was always like "you know this is a fantasy world right o.o" I like the idea of Khali inventing makeup! I won't even let the know it all historian version of me come out and say random facts to disprove the idea. because khali is soo badass! she could totally invent it if she wanted too.

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