you truly are talented. I really wish you would make full length stories. there is so much depth and development that could transpire. Loved it : )

who doesn't just love the Beatles? :)
But seriously, this was very well written, with wonderful images and great metaphors. You are great with sensory images, it seems. The work does seem a little bit out of the box for you, but that's probably a good thing. It's always good to stretch those boundaries.
I guess, all in all, good job at showing just some of your versatility (which I probably spelled wrong) as a writer.