Very interesting manipulation of nursery rhymes.

I like your formatting of "Why," "When," "How," and "Where." Not only do they give an interesting rhythm to the stanzas, but if they are read alone it almost gives a summary, and a new meaning to what you're saying.

[Tears and kisses,/lies and promises./The deepest blue,/and the lightest green.] I have to say that this is my favorite stanza. The use of colors here is very interesting. It kind of goes along with the psychology of how certain colors make people feel; the single color is expressing so much more.

[A penny for starvation/suffering for us all.] I thought the first line there needed punctuation (a comma, I think). But other than that, your punctuation was very good. It's grammatically correct, plus it helps the rhythm and flow of the poem.

Happy New Year!

Hmm, I liked the twist you've put on the nursery rhymes. I think that it's a clever idea, and my favourite one was the second stanza, because you've included the message of the nursery rhyme in there - 'rotten with disease'.
However, I got a bit confused after the third stanza. I wasn't sure which rhyme you were referencing. Also the last stanza seems to include the 'ring o' roses' one again, which confused me more. I think if you want to mention that rhyme more than once then it needs to run throughout the whole poem, not just two of the stanzas.
I also wasn't too sure about the 'How', 'When' etc. Why did you stop including those one-word questions? I'm sure there's a reason, I just couldn't see it.
Overall, I like the concept of this poem, and it's worded beautifully, I just think a few things need more clarification.
-Amy

I don't read much poetry on FP, but I liked this. It really seems like a twisted disdain for fun and brightness in life, but not in a blatant way. The last part makes it sound like it's reflecting a breakup or something.

Cool idea, the style of writing sort of reminds me of Hole or something.

I like the darker twists on nursery rhymes; it gives the poem freshness and originality.
Favourite lines:
"Our pockets full of flowers,
rotten with disease."

I didn't like how some of the lines were fragments and I coundn't tell what they were coming off of:
"When / ringing around the rosie, / we all fall down." ,
"How / the money goes, / when the weasel pops." , and
"Where / smiles of the children, / bring clarity to the song." Maybe that's just me not getting something though.

Over all, many nice lines, which were evocative of the dark feeling.