Reviews for An Accidental Kiss

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aymmi 2008-06-19 ch 9,	abuse1) My favourite character is Deacon. I usually like the main character the best but Vaughn's character seems too undeveloped, too perfect and her emotions are too random and unrealistic. I like Deacon because he seems like he likes Vaughn and he leaves these little hints but doesn't make everything too obvious. I find it unbelievable that Ryan would go along with his sisters plan because he has nothing to gain out of it. Violet sucks, I find it weird how shes in the plan. Did Katrina tell everyone her plan? Katrina sucks. She seems like the typical . Give her more character. Camille is too trusting. Wyatt appears to randomly between every other chapter, when he got drunk it wasn't even explained why. 2) I'd rather have Vaughn end up with Ryan. Although I find it weird that Vaughn isn't suspicious of him yet. Hes shown that hes close to his sister by sitting with her at lunch and Vaughn finds herself to be average looking so why wouldn't she be suspicious that out of all the girls in the school, Ryan would choose her? 3) Her feelings/emotions are too random. Like when she first went to Vaughn's house she acted civil and nice but before she gave Vaughn multiple glares.I don't like her. 4) Camille and Ryan together as a couple? Hell no. A sequal with Wyatt and Camille would be nice. 5) Yes. Vaughn doesn't seem like a trusting character. 6) More character development more Zack (I think) and Vaugn. 7) They don't seem like brother and sister. More like boyfriend and girlfriend. 8) Yes. 9) No. Heres are random plot for you: Vaughn and Ryan continue their secret relationship as boyfriend/girlfriend. Zack's pretty older sister enters their high school as a new student and is automatically friends with Vaughn, Deacon and Camille. Shes openly bisexual and has a crush on Vaughn, she tells her secret to Camille, who likes Deacon and secretly hates Vaughn because Deacon likes her. Camille tells Zack's sister that Vaughn's in a relationship with Ryan. Zack's older sister gets desperate and convinces Camille to start a plan with her : seduce Ryan and get Vaughn to catch them in the act and break them up, after a makeover to make Camille less goth. Zack's older sister would find a time comfort Vaughn and get closer to her after the break up. Katrina and Violet catch on to their plan and they tell Camille about their plan, Camille convinces Zack's sister to join their group and the four of them secretly hold meetings at that special library where Vaughn went to get Zack's books after Katrina finds out that Ryan actually likes Vaughn. They start the plan except Ryan isn't attracted to Camille because he finds her to be not her type but Vaughn catches them with Camille all over Ryan and they break up. Deacon becomes the one to comfort Vaughn and Zack's sister is off. Yeah its really twisted and confusing and I don't know how to end it but it was just a random thought that I had to type out in one minute. Your storys nice though.
Sunnyboy02 2008-06-16 ch 9,	abuseOkay first question:I think Deacon is my favorite character, I use to REALLY like Vaughn but now she is so free and easy, I liked her better when she was cool and aloof. 2?: Deacon...Ryan an idiot...i mean whip cream? 3? What about her?? 4? Why don't you finish the first book first! Then I'll answer that! 5?Yes and no. A relationship could probably evolve that fast, in real life. 6?I would add "fastness". It's moving too slow. 7? Pretty lame if you ask me. 8? I think you should advance the characters you have now. 9? NO WAY! Wyatt should totally end up with Camille
Cerasylvania 2008-06-15 ch 9,	abuseby the way loved screamed no when i came to this page because i wanted to read more anyway favorite character i would have to say is vaughn because we are similar in some ways so i connect with her i want vaughn to end up with ryan so much a sequel sounds good but not with camille and ryan together but maybe with them in it would be great. nope not really but it was a kiss that tasted like heaven to him maybe within the story you could have vaughns thoughts on the kiss. maybe have camille and deacon end up together or camille meets vaughns brother wyatt and they end up together either one. i think wyatts and vaughns relationship could end up becoming closer because it is sad that they have a relationship where she stays away from him. have her brother find out why she is staying away from him. more characters is up to you but i think its alright for now but you could if you wanted to no i do not think katrina should end up with wyatt she is a ** she wants revenge and i understand why but i mean still and vaughns brother wouldn't take to kindly if he finds out that it was katrinas plan to do that to his sister so i don't think they should end up together maybe have katrina go into a mental ward or something.
blair powers 2008-06-11 ch 9,	abusehey!! update soon! my fav character is (of course) Vaughn and I really want her to end up with Ryan!! and i dont think that their relationship has evolved too fast!
Alex 2008-06-11 ch 9, anon.	abuseI know how writer's block feels. Update soon please!
despite-the-protest 2008-06-11 ch 9,	abuseCamille. Ryan. Camille is the best. I think Camille should end up with Wyatt. No, not too fast. No, you're doing a good job. Wyatt and Vaughn should make-up. No more characters. [keep the story small] No, she's bitchy. Camille, definitely. Alright then!
allyg1990 2008-06-11 ch 9,	abuseOkay, q answers... 1) I'd like vaughn to end up with Ryan. Vaughn/Deacon seems a little too weird. 2) The relationship is going fine. Don't worry about that. 3) Some Wyatt/Vaughn conflict would be great. E.g. Wyatt flipping out at her for going out with Ryan while he can't go out with Katrina. W and K should end up together. Hope that helps!
Alex 2008-06-11 ch 9, anon.	abuseI like Ryan a lot. Even though he seems kind of evil, as you are trying to portray him, everyone can't help but like the male lead. Deacon seems AWESOME [ Jared Padalecki is awesome as well ] but not AS awesome as Ryan. Camille and Ryan - NO. Find someone else but NOT Vaughn's man. Lol
pinkeclipse 2008-06-10 ch 9,	abuseVaughn & Ryan and Katrina & Wyatt. think vaughn and katrina need to talk and katrina needs to know why vaughn did not approve of her.
rachely 2008-06-10 ch 9,	abuseEven though Ryan is just doing this to help out his step-sister, I love him!! Although it'd be total cliche if she ended up with her best friend, the story isn't based around them and then Ryan would be babsically useless to the story. Stick to him. :) A suggestion though- maybe have Deacon confess feelings for Vaughn, and either have her turn him down, but them be perfectly ok; or have them try to be together, but Ryan just gets jealous, Vaughn isn't into it and is basically just using Deacon, and Deacon realizes it all and doesn't feel as strongly as he THOUGHT he did. If that makes sense. :) Camille; I like her. :) A sequel would be great..explaining how Ryan and Vaughn are if they end up together, (which I think they should and WILL :P), but maybe focusing on another character. Maybe Camille. Maybe her and Wyatt should end up together. Getting to know each at the end of this one; furthering things in the sequel. :) I don't think their relationship is moving too fast because eventually Vaughn will find out about Ryan's original intentions and she'll quickly go to hating him, but she'll realize that he truly cares for her and that she truly cares for him. I wish Wyatt and Vaughn would talk about things and become close again. I mean, it seems to me that they used to be close. I don't think new characters are needed really. NO NO NO! Katrina is a ** and Wyatt deserves so much more! I don't hate you, although I wish you could update sooner. You're still pretty cool. :P Hope you like my suggestions. :)
sarahsarahsarah 2008-06-08 ch 8,	abuseOh my God. Oh my ** god. GAH! I love it so friggin much - it's seriously awesome. Keep updating, okay? I love you poop head. :]
allyg1990 2008-05-29 ch 8,	abuseAw! Ryan's perspective was very welcome- the foodfight was very cliched but cutely done. :)
rachely 2008-05-27 ch 8,	abuseYAY :) So happy you finally updated. I know what you mean by the end of the year stuff though so it's ok. :) It seems like Deacon could have been upset about it because he likes her? Hope not, it's already dramatic enough without the love triangle. Maybe he heard something about Katrina's revenge? I don't know, maybe it's not at all. This was sweet :) By the way, I do like Ryan's POV because now I know that he really wants her. :)
pinkeclipse 2008-05-27 ch 8,	abuseDeacon likes her!
Sunnyboy02 2008-05-27 ch 8,	abuseGirls seriously think it's a nasty habit to stick your hands into your pockets? Damn. Xeres Hanley

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