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| cyanidecandy 2008-03-25 ch 1,  | abusei like the plot, but i'm curious to know why u don't use the first or third person to describe the persona's perspective. and please paragraph ! it's really hard to read !! =( and the underlining of the words is a bit too much for the eyes as well. but other than that, i really thought the plot and idea was good. just hope u can take my tips into consideration !! keep updating though :) |