Sweetness!

oh my god...
this is awesome...
but then again, everything i've read by you has been, so...
you are very talented...lucky...
don't waste your gift! and please use it AGAINST the forces of evil, not with! i'd hate to be against you in a literary fight.

Beautifully dark. I hope you have read Clive Barker and Jeff Lindsey. I read this and jumped to one of my Barker books, lustful of more darkness.
Besides this, I have been reading your stuff and it just leaves me wanting more. Explore the common themes in your stories and poems and make them come together. Why stop there, on short stories? Slowly but surely a novel can be created from all this creativity and love for horror. A novel is a big enterprise and commitment, but if done right it can be a symphony of darkness and read and not just simple melodies of horror. Keep it up though, you're in the right track. As you grow older and live more, you'll eventually know what real pain and horror is. I hope.

Ha! This came out flawlessly! Very dark but funny, in a way, as well.

-Shadow

Wow! I really, really love this poem, it flowed so well while telling the story... I don't even have any suggestions on how to improve, I think it's fine the way it is.

really creepy and interesting... I like how you say what they said. That was nice. I also like the ending, really powerful.

This poem was chilling, and very good. The only thing I didn't like was the line "And so I listen, you see" and the last line. There was nothing wrong with the wording, they just did not quite fit with the rhythm I got from rest of the poem. Maybe the middle one could be, "And so, you see, I listen,"? That would just flow better, in my opinion.

It was a really good poem, though, and I loved the idea behind it!

~RM

I think this is very good, just maybe add some more to it ;)

Awesome poem! You managed to get inside the head of an insane person, and you wrote it very well! I don't know what you could do with this, maybe continue on with more poems about how the main character gets caught and put into an insane asylum, or maybe the voices tell him to kill and not to stop, to kill all in his way. I look forward to reading more!

This poem is very good overall, there is just one thing I'd like cleared up. You mentioned raising the dead in one line, that's also mentioned in the title. I'm not quite clear on that since the entire poem is about killing and not bringing the dead back to life. Other then that, I see no other problems.