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| B. M. Reed 2008-03-26 ch 1,   | This is very unique...the first stanza is so pleasant and calm, and the image is very beautiful, and then the last two lines there is a shift, which I think is good. Usually the shift happens in the next stanza, and it can catch you off guard. But this shift is good and it flows without interruption. You did a nice job! |
| Moondog Dozier 2008-03-25 ch 1, | This has an interesting complexity. The two stanzas seem like seperate entities, and then on the second read they meld into an overall picture of the vocal scene. Well written. MD:77. |