Really helpful summary of some important concepts. Also, thanks for the links on your profile.
BTW, what's your first language?

Wow, dear, this was very nice and overly useful to read! (Sorry, but upon seeing this, I just had to read this before What If, I hope you don't mind...) I have found some great advice here that I believe will come in handy while writing the multichapter fic I'm now working on. Thank you! :D

~Sphinx

These: "“Oh, my god.” He turned away from the window toward Ann, his eyes wide, the hand lifting before his mouth. How could this be? How could they betray him like [that]?" and " “I hate you,” she breathed gently into his ear." are the best examples you've had in the whole essay. The first one flows very well (except for the missing 'that'), and the second one's just intriguing--I'd read a story that started like that.

Good chapter, better than the others. I would indeed be interested in reading another one, especially about "what do the little notepads have to do with it".

Your examples about pacing aren't that great--sorry, I gotta agree with that. But your descriptions of what pacing is are legitimate, I think, and people on fictionpress really need to know things like that.

The action/reaction bit is in fact a pet peeve of mine, and I'd want to edit ""Ouch." He pinched me." too. :)

I agree with the bit about stating "he was so angry", but not with the "tell don't show" bit. Your first, longer, 'boring' example set the scene for a place, which is essential. Unless you've described the scene already and know that there's an oak door and its sunny etc., you do in fact need those things there, and working them into the action (the character's walking) is a good way to do that. I prefer the "show" version.

The sequence you used for the examples is the win. So funny and self-referential!

So far, your writing is just decent. But, it's probably quite beneficial to this site for someone to point out simple concepts like these, and so kudos for that. You knew what you were talking about with this one, and I'll read on.

Some of it is kind of twisted advice. If you want to pick some tips from me, maybe, I’ll put up a guide soon, too.

Sorry, but your essay isn’t much of one. Well, there is things we need to go over, here.
Firstly, I know English is a difficult language, and I am also a eld student, or once was. Still, there is no excuse for such sloppy writing. You just need the effert. Please, put some in. Your disability you can easily work around. People take a certain amount of time, take double or triple the time. I also have one. Lets say it takes two minutes for some person to post a review. It takes me three or even four minutes. I just take the time and keep polishing it. I know it’s frustrating and time consuming, but make the time. Maybe keep a dictionary close, or go to ). Thirdly, no not every character should get a paragraph for their pov, because that would be so shittyly confusing, by the time you finish, everyone would have left. I wouldn’t be surprised if people left by the fourth paragraph. Fourthly, maybe no one takes your reviews seriously, because you write so sloppily. I mean if you critique, you have to write professionally, so people won’t consider you a joke.
Yes, I once wrote like you, and trust me, I got the same treatment as you. Actually, I got worse. So, please, you need some work.

BTW put this on your profile
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Hey there. You've made some good points and given explanations on why you should or shouldn't do such and such but they could be a little more indepth. But considering English is your second language - I probably wouldn't have guessed if you hadn't mentioned it - I think you've done fantastically in this.

Also I think adding links to other essays and such in your bio is a great way of helping other writers. Keep it up.

~Marie Silver~

Thank you for sharing the information!
It helped me!
If I wasn't so lazy I would go and use those tips on my story right now.
Oh, don't worry about the grammar mistakes. My first language isn't english either and I could easily understand you!
I'm going to add this to my favorites and use the information, someday.
Once again, Thank you!
~goldxleaves

Yeah ithink i get it. thanks for the tips.