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| Laura Schiller 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseIt sounds like he/she is about to commit suicide...which according to Christian beliefs is actually a sin. So maybe they won't find 'the light of God' after all. Still, it's a great poem - you were more careful with the rhyme than me - and I like the light/darkness contrast. The chess metaphor is also good. |
| Evan, Reality Defiant 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseYes. I do like the style on this. Great work. |