Reviews for Maelstorm's Offspring

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Twilight Starr 2008-07-01 ch 3,	abuseI wouldn't have told the reason why he let her escape. Most of us can infer that from his mention of her special talents. Nice work. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2008-07-01 ch 2,	abuseThat's certainly doesn't sound good. Great job on not making Zelma perfect. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~
Twilight Starr 2008-07-01 ch 1,	abuseI like the title. Great job at description--especially with the fight scene. Nice work. Keep writing! Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer. ~Twilight Starr~
DigitalScripter 2008-06-22 ch 3,	abuseHonestly I couldn't notice anything wrong with this chapter. Well length could have maybe been a bit longer then again it's not like this chapter just ended abruptly. It was a good cliff hanger kind of ending. I'm starting to understand Kiki more here. Good work.
Adakua 2008-06-15 ch 4,	abuseThank you for the review. It helped me get back to my writing :D But seriously if you ever make it to the manga business you should get a artist to draw your story, cause its too good! Aww Ji-ku! Adakua
Niki Tori 2008-06-15 ch 6,	abuse^_^ Sweet it's Yuki ^_^! Great chappie Kiki kicked bird butt. X 3 I like D's grin.^_^ it's so cute. lol. looking forward to read more. ^_^.
SympleSymon 2008-06-11 ch 1,	abuseReview Return! First off, I love how you start the chapter with a few words in capitals. Don't know why, I just love that style... Also, starting the story off with such an epic, heated battle is a great decision, and hooks the reader in quickly and successfully. I'm not usually one for anthro stories but, save for the time when you directly referred to their species or their tails, or whatever, I seriously didn't notice. Take that as you will, but it worked for me - I loved this first chapter! A few pointers: 'For a change of pace, Tsura who attacked this time.' Should probably be 'For a change of pace, [it was] Tsura who attacked this time.' OR 'For a change of pace, Tsura attacked this time.' Also, "Understand!" doesn't make much sense...maybe it was supposed to be a question? "Understand?" Or "Understand?!" Anyway, enough nitpicking - loved this so far! Cy/Dave
wolfblood82 2008-06-10 ch 6,	abuseHeya there! It's me again lol! :D Anyway, glad to see you update on this one. :) Well, basically, a good chapter. I'm beginning to like Draven more and more. If anything's to go by, he my fave character at the moment. Well, never expect Yuki to appear so soon by the way, but I guess Kenji will be in the fray sooner or later from what I've seen here. Maybe he's the Southern Lord. I don't know to be honest. :S Anyway, thanks very much for your review reply. Hope to see more of your reviews for Elven Chronicles soon! ^^ Bye! :)
Niki Tori 2008-06-09 ch 5,	abuseCouldn't resist reading more before tomorrow. Awesome chappie. D rocks! ^_^.
Niki Tori 2008-06-09 ch 4,	abuselol. Draven better run! Zelma is so tough! I wouldn't want to mess with her if I was a cat spirit. lol. Then there is Ji-ku. I will not comment on him. Just saying I like the cat spirit D. more then I like him. Well I don't know if I will later on in the story. But right now that's pretty much how it's going down. lol. ^_^. Anywho I plan to read some more tomorrow. Again this story is really good!
Niki Tori 2008-06-09 ch 3,	abuseKiki and her awesome daggers are back! Well she was already here but as a infant for the first two chappies. Zelma is so motherly! ^_^ I really miss The Awakening. =(. Anywho can't wait to read more. So I am moving on to the next chappie!
Niki Tori 2008-06-09 ch 2,	abuseAwesome chappie. Zelma kicks butt! lol. Thanks very much for taking time out to review my story. Yeah Mimi is going a little nutty but things will change soon. lol. ON TO THE NEXT CHAPPIE!
Adakua 2008-05-23 ch 3,	abuseI really hope you really work on this story cause its so good so far. And I wandered what the spirited wanted? Keep it up adakua
wolfblood82 2008-05-13 ch 5,	abuseWow. Screwed up village with screwed up people there. Anyway, I think Draven could end up like a twisted version of Gandalf here lawl! :D Anyway, nothing much to complain here. Just that I'm interested to see where you will take the issue of darkkan race here in terms of what exactly is that particular race. Maybe you can do it in your A/N or in the chapter. I don't know, but I'm definitely looking forward to seeing you do the explanation in the future. Apart from that, nothing much to say. And yeah, sucks to know that you're hitting problems in terms of free time. :( Anyway, hope that you can find more free time to enjoy what you do in the future and also hope to see your reviews for Elven Chronicles soon! ^^ Bye! :)
DigitalScripter 2008-05-12 ch 2,	abuseI like how you start off your chapters. Gives diversity to your story. Fight scenes work well here and you did a good job.

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