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| kisses-and-gasoline 2008-05-11 ch 2,  | abuseWow Alishya I really love this! Justine is such an awesome character, and the dialogue with Susan is great, especially when she's talking about how babies grow gills in the womb and then she's pregnant, I really didn't expect that. More please :D |
| Twilightfever 2008-05-06 ch 2, | abuseGreat! But really short... :[ Update |
| Twilightfever 2008-05-06 ch 1, | abuseO_O wow, that was great. Suprising but...great! -Update!- |
| shutitoff 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI thought I should start by saying that I didn't realise until halfway through that the narrator was a girl (even though Susan walks in on her in the bathroom). Also, the punctuation irked me, you need to learn how to capitalise. Aside from that, this story has so much potential! It was very touching, especially the end. I thought the end was written well, tied the whole thing together nicely. |
| mythlady11 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abusenice. i like this. |