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| choirluvr 2008-07-11 ch 7,  | abuseI'm confused who is "he"? emanuel?? whoever "he" is you've fallen hard 4 him. :) |
| choirluvr 2008-07-11 ch 4, | abuseBad day? reading the next one :) |
| choirluvr 2008-07-11 ch 2, | abusepausing before I read the next one. (P.S. be proud of your accent I've always loved texan drawls. and I have long dark hair too. I'm also too afraid to do anything dramatic with it)gonna read the next one :) |
| choirluvr 2008-07-11 ch 1, | abuseI like your poem alot, The style of writing is cool, I've never seen it before, and don't worry I'm comma happy too, keep on writing, :) |
| DiaRose 2008-04-21 ch 10, | abuseOh, pretty! I really love the way this one reads! Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-04-17 ch 9, | abuseLovely! I really like how some lines are just lists, it's like a half-thought. Usually that doesn't sound great, but you really pulled it off. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-04-14 ch 8, | abuseOoh, I love the feeling of this one! I think you're very good at conveying a mood. It's obvious in this story that you're experimenting and testing yourself as a writer, and I think that's a lovely thing to see. It's reassuring that even a writer as talented as yourself is intent on improving and changing. I'm really loving this. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-04-14 ch 7, | abuseLovely! I love the second stanza, for some reason. I'm not entirely sure what this story is about, but it's really captivating, and interesting to read. I think the style is amazing, and unpredictable. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-04-14 ch 6, | abuseOoh, I think it's really cool how you did it this way... I don't know what it is, but it's really interesting how the style of the story turns! Nice. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-03-28 ch 4, | abuseI like it. It's... I like it in an odd way. I don't even know how to explain it. It's really great writing. Love, ~Dia |
| Stellaciel Blue 2008-03-27 ch 3, anon. | abusecomma-happy, you say? well, i agree with every single one this time around, so it doesn't matter to me. i LOVE it. Lovelovelove. DiaRose says it doesn't sound like your usual work as much, and I think I agree, but I like this very muchly. Marci sounds honest- no denial. I feel like I can relate to her and I feel like I can FEEL the atmosphere of the coffee place and it all makes me feel like I'm high on this story. I don't have much experience with this style, but as far as I can tell, you do it incredibly well. It reads natural. My only problem was that I didn't realize in the first page that each person started after the semicolon; I thought it was a new person with each stanza. But I understand now, after going back, so I suppose it was my fault to begin with. Anyways, keep going! Can't wait to read more (seriously)! You. are. brilliant. |
| DiaRose 2008-03-27 ch 3, | abuseI quite like this. It's very final, and simply lovely. Wonderful. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-03-27 ch 2, | abuseI think you should keep it up, there's a really good atmosphere to it. Love, ~Dia |
| DiaRose 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseWell, I have a strange opinion of this one. Most of your poems, if I hadn't known who had written them, I would probably have a good guess that it was you. This one had the feel of your work just the same, but it was a bit different. The wording was unlike you, I think is what I'm trying to say, it's taken at face value. I like it, though it has less of a mystical and deep feel than most of your work. I think the air of sophistication is fitting, and done very well! Love ~Dia PS: I thought you disappeared! |