Great story!
Thank you for writing your story down to share with others!

Really good chapter. Clare has a good heart. i loved the last line, where she wants the dreams again. it shows how she is positvly getting through her loss with amounts of strength from her loved ones and God.
Amazing job.

it was good for her to confide in her friend. though it is so hard, it was a short and sweet chapter full of strength.

how sweet. i like that: a visit.
that was really a good chapter! :)

this is really good. i cant wait to see what happens next. i love the spiritual aspect of it.

how sad! oh no this is too sad. but you write it very well withthe right touch of emotion. incredibly done.

You have a nice start here. The title was very catchy and I particuarly liked how you handed the scene when the phone rang. Putting the rings in while the dialogue was happening helped the reader visualize the scene better.

While on the topic of dialogue, I thought that you had a bit too much for a first chapter. I would have rather read more details about the characters themselves. Dialogue can help, but thier words can only go so far in describing thier personalities. Just a suggestion.

Keep it up!

Oh, she shouldnt have told her mother that! That would just make her mom more stressed and nervous!
Oh this is sad. i hope dad comes back ok.
Nice work so far.

she didnt know her friends dad had died? that seems strange.
and sad.
I can only imagine what your main character is going through!!

oh this is so sad.
nice work though.

='( How sad! Please continue. =3