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| generically beautiful 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abusehysterical angles, / like the ones we made yesterday. These two lines are fantastic. They actually made me laugh, even though they could be taken quite seriously. Your word usage is lovely, and you have a broad vocabulary. Great job! =) -Christine |
| fairytale failure 2008-03-26 ch 2, | abuseI love the idea of this collection, I hope you write more! I like how you describe one aspect of this person in each chapter - it's like the reader gets to fit together a puzzle of who they are. My favourite lines were 'dry skin and bones that sit akimbo and askew,' that was very strong imagery. |