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| fatbird33 2008-03-29 ch 1,  | abusei liked the repetitionof time takes and never gives, it was powerful and it's so true. |
| flawlessangel08 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI like your personification for time my favourite part is Time takes, but never gives Never gives back what we would keep Forever Because ‘Forever’ is just a word |
| SEMMU 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseHere's my favorite part: Because ‘Forever’ is just a word And words are Time’s sighs that break and float away on a wind that never stops I can tell you cut and paste. This poem would benefit immensely from stanzas. Use stanzas to seperate your imagery and thoughts. Write on! |
| Skyefire 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abusei really really like this piece...short and sweet and to the point...there is a lot of emotion...its very endearing |
| Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI like how the poem takes a turn at the end. This way it's evident that there really is a tragedy connected to the first part of the poem, and the narrator is venting. Great job, especially with the line 'And words are Time’s sighs'. |