You painted a great picture of the world, so definate points for your use of imagry. I liked the arbitrary and carelessness of the protagonist, but the story/chapter (I assume you're continuing this, the story doesn't say 'COMPLETE' yet) is too short for me to really care about him. While leaving him undeveloped is a good way to distance him from the reader, and add to a sense of depersonalization, it isn't exactly a great way to attract empathy from the audience.

So far, I think it's intriguing. Please continue!

I really liked the story, it was well paced and drew me along. This is a good first chapter for a social-science fiction, and I'll definitely be adding it to my favorite stories. The story didn't reveal too much about the overall plot, but the protagonist's desentsitized aspect/thoughts definetly contributed to the story's atmosphere. Hope to read more, and keep up the excellent work! =D