ah! so good. update soon!

cute...

She leaned down to glance worriedly at a bush she had never before expressed the slightest interest in beforehand. -- the two 'before's are redundant...

aw, so sweet =3 realistic, too... mostly, anyway. kudos to you ^^

Aw this is cute d:D

aw...goes to show that not everything can or should be scripted...

I quite enjoyed the story; it's very, VERY real, in my experience at least.

But, I have to say, I hate the 'Third Person POV' at the beginning. Sorry, but it just doesn't seem necessary.

Interesting! And true... =) I'd say this is a job well done!