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under the influence
2008-04-02
ch 2,
abusecute...

She leaned down to glance worriedly at a bush she had never before expressed the slightest interest in beforehand. -- the two 'before's are redundant...
theforbiddensong
2008-04-01
ch 2,
abuseaw, so sweet =3 realistic, too... mostly, anyway. kudos to you ^^
Artemis Anderson
2008-04-01
ch 1,
abuseAw this is cute d:D
under the influence
2008-03-28
ch 1,
abuseaw...goes to show that not everything can or should be scripted...
Conspiracy Unit
2008-03-26
ch 1,
abuseI quite enjoyed the story; it's very, VERY real, in my experience at least.

But, I have to say, I hate the 'Third Person POV' at the beginning. Sorry, but it just doesn't seem necessary.
Faithfully Yours
2008-03-26
ch 1,
abuseInteresting! And true... =) I'd say this is a job well done!
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