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| under the influence 2008-04-02 ch 2, | abusecute... She leaned down to glance worriedly at a bush she had never before expressed the slightest interest in beforehand. -- the two 'before's are redundant... |
| theforbiddensong 2008-04-01 ch 2, | abuseaw, so sweet =3 realistic, too... mostly, anyway. kudos to you ^^ |
| Artemis Anderson 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseAw this is cute d:D |
| under the influence 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abuseaw...goes to show that not everything can or should be scripted... |
| Conspiracy Unit 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseI quite enjoyed the story; it's very, VERY real, in my experience at least. But, I have to say, I hate the 'Third Person POV' at the beginning. Sorry, but it just doesn't seem necessary. |
| Faithfully Yours 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseInteresting! And true... =) I'd say this is a job well done! |