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Take the Money and Run 2008-04-02 ch 1,	abuseAgreeing with the person--ahem--below me, you could've at least given a bit of constructive critisism some people are more bothered by cliches than others. anyway having said that, i like this poem. Just like your other ones, the flow is incredible. The only thing I think should be improved is the punctuation, it seems very inconsistent. Oh and i like how it starts too. Nice job!
Shadow In The Twilight 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseshut up person on top or above me cuzim not sure which order its in! if your going to critisize some1 atleast say saything good and then bad plus she was just expressing herself...every poem doesnt have to b good!!
In the Rye 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseit was very cliche. not very original, either.