Reviews for Amor Adentro de Barcelona

party4siempre
2008-04-09
ch 2,

abuseNice.
Although it was a bit short... :(

Also, don't make it all bunched up. Make separate paragraphs for dialogue, etc.

party4siempre
2008-03-27
ch 1,

abuseFirst of all, the plot seems pretty interesting...i love summer trip stories!!

I caught a couple of mistakes though:
The first sentence is cut-off and then it says it again but continues. You probably just forgot to delete that first part (i think) so i just thought I'd let you know.

Another thing is that technically the title should read "Amor Adentro de Barcelona." If you were using a translator then the words it would say would be "Amor Adentro" but those things can be wrong. Spanish is my native tongue, so if you need any more help with phrases for the next couple chapters, I'd be happy to help :P

Other than that, the story has a lot of potential :D
Keep up the good work!

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