Reviews for An Appalachian Fate

electric feel 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abusei think this is working how it is. the story is good too
Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuseI'm reminded for some reason of Huxley's 'Brave New World' and John's experiences of being an outcast in society. The lines 'He’s drowned by her green gifts... Whether steel or coal or blood' especially brought out that connection for me. Maybe it's just me; I have a habit of picking out strange connections in writing. =P In 'Still, our world evolved, surronding', did you mean 'surrounding'? Just something I noticed. A great poem overall; it was enjoyable to read.
fatbird33 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abuseyou have a fantastic way with words, and i loved the message in this peice.
simpleplan13 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseThe hills his fathers found broke... Im not sure what that means found broke. Did they find them broken or were they broke when they found them. Also his fathers... kinda makes me think they were gay, but Im not sure that's what you meant. Some punctuation issues... His body breaks,; he ages fast... comma and then a semicolon Also I felt like it was seriously lacking periods. Also I felt like every line shouldn't have been capitalized, but that might just be a person style thing. AS for the piece itself I like it a lot. The descriptions were really beautiful... especially the personification in the end. I also love the little bits of alliteration. Really nicely done.