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| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-03-28 ch 1,  | abuseI love the reference at the end, how you have to be familiar with that image to get the second to last stanza. Lovely. I love the phrasing in this, too, especially how you phrased, "and breaking backs/on concrete i am/a paint chip, a spider/i am young young young." That just flows so effortlessly. It's beautiful. Keep writing! :) |