Reviews for What Are The Odds of Getting Even?

Reviews For: What Are The Odds of Getting Even?

Des D Mona 2008-06-09 ch 14,	abuseI love how you make it seem like a real life conversation is happening. The only thing I'd say at this point it edit. You've got some grammar mistakes here and there and only some are distracting from the story. What's next? I can't wait!
Des D Mona 2008-06-08 ch 13,	abuseAH! Crap, why Lizzie? Why? It's good. Mr. Mitchell is getting slightly creepy for my taste but I think he's just one of those people who has Ryann's best interests at heart. Their relationship is really coming along. Maybe something should happen at home like with Alex or something and she's got no one to turn to. Then Mr. Mitchell can become her confidant. And it's so obvious that he's the guitar teacher. But really cool at the same time. Good job. I can't wait to see what happens next!
Des D Mona 2008-05-31 ch 7,	abuseI am really enjoying this. I can't wait to see where it's going. Seriously, keep it up. You've got a good thing here. Try expanding Mr. Mitchell a little more or have like some crazy coinsidence happen like Mr. Mitchell is Wilson's uncle or something. But I like it a lot. :)
Des D Mona 2008-05-29 ch 6,	abuseI really enjoyed this. Read it over a couple of times because sometimes you mix up the brothers. I like this girl's attitude and her voice the only thing is i don't know where the story is going. You seem to just be narrating her life. Plus you say as usual a lot. However I like it a lot. Keep at it.
relishthebreath 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseYou have a few issues with verb tenses -- they switch from past to present a couple times and it creates confusion. Regarding the characters, I like Ryann, although the rebellious punk-rock school girl is fast becoming a cliche. That being said, it would be interesting to see her character become a little more distinctive. As for the potential pairing between a teacher and a high school student -- um. This is really risque and dare I say...makes me sort of uncomfortable at the idea. But maybe you're going to explore that provocative relationship. If you do deal with it, don't ignore the weightiness of this, because it has a lot of implications. Regardless, you have an ear for snappy dialogue and I really enjoyed the part about Ryann setting a new desktop to the school's computers. Keep up the good work!
M.J. Roy 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseI liked it until the end. I think that if a student was caught hacking into the network and posting obscene material that the principal would not be anywhere near laughing. I think the entire school would probably be outraged, and she would probably get more than just a private study hall. Honestly, I think what she did here would be worse than cutting class, punishment-wise. And also, I don't know how old Mr. Mitchell is supposed to be, but a middle-school aged student and a teacher sounds like an awful stretch for a relationship. Perhaps a junior or senior in high school, but I think middle school is a little young. And kind of creepy. Well, it's all creepy but that's especially creepy. Unless that's what you were going for. Your story was very well written, though. I loved the sarcasm.

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