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| TwilaStryker 2008-03-28 ch 5, | abuseI just HAD to read this again The part where Solia dies nearly makes me cry. :( I love Ash, but what do you do when one of your favorite characters kills another one of your favorite character? Hm... I dunno... So... yeah. ~Twila Stryker~ |
| D-Kat 2008-03-27 ch 1, | abuseWow, I already have a review? That's so cool. Thanks. And Leon is actually 17 years old when the main part of the story takes place. He was kidnapped when he was four and I thought it would be a bit more of an attention-getter if I said 'four-year-old.' I don't mind if you didn't take the story serious. ^_^ Leon is one of my 'not-so-main' characters and I was trying to do a stry as him. And I was never quite sure about the relationship between him and Ash either. Thanks for letting me know. I'll try to work on it when I get the chance--whenever THAT is... D-Kat |
| Lady D'Arque 2008-03-27 ch 5, | abuseWait wait wait, hold the phone... A four year old kid as an assassin?? The way the character speaks seems very mature for the age. And when you say four year old... I think of a little, cute kid prancing around. (Just being honest) I didn't really take the story seriously though T.T. And narrator's relationship with Ash is going on and off. "I've known him" "now i hate him for kilin' my friend," kinda thing-- not that its bad, its just I think he should get a solid ground on which side the narrator chooses. Anyway, quite good for ur first story up here :) I'm glad i'm the first to Review.. MUAHAHA And I read ur site and u said you disliked "Romantic Story" *snaps fingers* just when I was about to tell u to drop by my site and read my stuff... wahh T.T. Give mine a chance and review back eh?? Hahaha. You've joined jus 2 days ago rite? Welcome to FP :) -Lady D'Arque |