 iLostNemo 2008-03-27 . chapter 5Wait wait wait, hold the phone...
A four year old kid as an assassin?? The way the character speaks seems very mature for the age. And when you say four year old... I think of a little, cute kid prancing around. (Just being honest)
I didn't really take the story seriously though T.T. And narrator's relationship with Ash is going on and off. "I've known him" "now i hate him for kilin' my friend," kinda thing-- not that its bad, its just I think he should get a solid ground on which side the narrator chooses.
Anyway, quite good for ur first story up here :) I'm glad i'm the first to Review.. MUAHAHA
And I read ur site and u said you disliked "Romantic Story" *snaps fingers* just when I was about to tell u to drop by my site and read my stuff... wahh T.T. Give mine a chance and review back eh?? Hahaha.
You've joined jus 2 days ago rite? Welcome to FP :)
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