Reviews for Would You Help Me?

Princess-anna57 2008-04-25 ch 1,	abuseGood raw emotion. Well done. I think the other reviewers have said what I want to say so i'll just leave it here. Write on! ~Anna~ ^_^
Lurid Black 2008-04-23 ch 1,	abuseThis was great, the only thing I can try to improve on it is the need for more punctuation, but aside from that, it was diverse, and well written. Write on! ~Lurid~
water lorelei 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuseThis sounds like a plea- something that just bursts out of you. In that sense I like it. But the flow could be a little tweaked- between the short lines and long lines, it feels like it has no rhythm. I don't know, the raw feeling of it is nice, but it seems a little too naked in the sunlight. xoxoxoxo
Andrea Lotte 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseI like how it ends with a question, but truthfully it's a bit too literal. It can still have that nice, quick, simple feel to it (with the short lines and all) but perhaps you could develop it a bit more? I don't know, it's just a suggestion. Good work, anyhow. The narrator's sense of desperation comes through with the short lines. Nice work there.
Random-Idiocity 2008-03-27 ch 1,	abuseThis was a good poem I liked the ending too, a hopeful kind of crying out. Keep it Up!